the bar chart below shows the number of miles travelled in a year by a men and woman for six different purposes in a particular country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the bar chart below shows the number of miles travelled in a year by a men and woman for six different purposes in a particular country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates how many
miles
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women and
men
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covered for various purposes encompassing
day
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trips
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, entertainment, meeting friends, taking children to school, shopping and
work
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in a year.
Overall
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, women surpassed
men
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in all mileage
trips
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except
day
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trips
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,
work
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and entertainment. Both males and females do fewer
day
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trips
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compared to other
trips
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. Significantly, the majority of both genders travel for
work
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followed by shopping.
According to
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the graph, ladies spend around 7000
miles
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for a
day
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trip
whereas
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men
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cover approximately 10000
miles
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in a year. For
work
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, males travel 35000
miles
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and females travel 30000
miles
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. In view of entertainment,
men
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exhibited a mileage of around 15000 and women with slightly over 10000
miles
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.
However
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, meeting friends, taking children to school and shopping were dominated by females in a year with 25000
miles
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, 27000
miles
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and 30000
miles
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, respectively and
in contrast
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, meeting friends, taking children to school and shopping done by
men
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was 22000 , 26000 and 28000
miles
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.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words miles, men, day, trips, work with synonyms.
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