the bar chart below shows the number of miles travelled in a year by a men and woman for six different purposes in a particular country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. task 1

the bar chart below shows the number of miles travelled in a year by a men and woman for six different purposes in a particular country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.  task 1
The bar chart demonstrates how many
miles
women and
men
covered for various purposes encompassing
day
trips
, entertainment, meeting friends, taking children to school, shopping and
work
in a year.
Overall
, women surpassed
men
in all mileage
trips
except
day
trips
,
work
and entertainment. Both males and females do fewer
day
trips
compared to other
trips
. Significantly, the majority of both genders travel for
work
followed by shopping.
According to
the graph, ladies spend around 7000
miles
for a
day
trip
whereas
men
cover approximately 10000
miles
in a year. For
work
, males travel 35000
miles
and females travel 30000
miles
. In view of entertainment,
men
exhibited a mileage of around 15000 and women with slightly over 10000
miles
.
However
, meeting friends, taking children to school and shopping were dominated by females in a year with 25000
miles
, 27000
miles
and 30000
miles
, respectively and
in contrast
, meeting friends, taking children to school and shopping done by
men
was 22000 , 26000 and 28000
miles
.
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