The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework irhouseholds in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The

firs

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first

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chart illustrates data concerning the percentage of alterations in using

electerical

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electrical

facilities by homes over an almost a

centry

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century

period between 1920 to 2019, and the second table elucidates information about the number of hours every

housholde

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household

households

spend

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on chores

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weeky

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weekly

week

basis. From

overall

perspactive

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perspective

, it is clearly evident that the

usge

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usage

use

of washing machines,

refrigrator

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refrigerators

refrigerator

and

vacuun

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vacuum

cleaner rose dramatically.

In contrast

less

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fewer

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hours people allocate to chores. On the one hand, regarding the proportion of

using

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people's

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appliances,

initially

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initially,

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refrigrator

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refrigerator

stod

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stayed

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at 0% in 1920, after that surged to 100% and all the people used it in 1980 and

then

remained the same

untill

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until

2019.

Also

, vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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exoerienced

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experienced

the same trend,

started

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starting

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from 30% and

then

enhanced

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enhancing

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significantly

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and

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then

reach

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reaching

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the

climac

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climb

at 100% by 2000.

Furthermore

, usage of washing

machine

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machines

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started at 40%,

then

increased to

approximtly

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approximately

75% by 2019.

On the other hand

, with respect to

number

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a number

the number

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of individuals who do chores, the figure represented 50 at

firs

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first

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in 1920, before

decline

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declining

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sharply to nearly 15 in 1980, next

decrease

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decreasing

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gradually to 10 by 2019.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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184 words

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