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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The following map compares two feasible locations for the construction
a
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new supermarket in the
town
 named Garisdon . From an
overall
 perspective, it can be clearly seen that the industrial
area
 expanded significantly.
While
 , centre of the
town
 is a
traffic- free
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 zone .
According to
 what
shown
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,
the
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s1 is located
north- west
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 of
rural
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the rural
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area
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. The second proposed s2
situated
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 in the middle centre of the
town
 . The s2 site is located in the
town
 centre which allows better accessibility. Interestingly , residential
area
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lying
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 in the top north and in the south. It is remarkable in that there is a larger
area
 that surrounds the core
area
it
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 is
industrial
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the industrial
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area
 . In
the
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terms of the main roads across from the industry with a population of 29.000 . Another city with inhabitants
15.000
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 it
is lying
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 16km
to
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 Branson . There is the Hindi have , specifically in the top
of
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left corner , with
population
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a population
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10.000
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of 10.000
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 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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