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These days, in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers,particularly in secondary schools. What are the reason for this, and how could the problem be solved?

#countries #people #teachers #schools #reason
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In recent years, the
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number
 of individuals who intended to become
instructores
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instructors
, particularly secondary ones, have been diminished.
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 problem, ultimately will suggest that schools should consider
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 their
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situation
 by hiring more
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 and several workshops should be held for new instructors in order to get along well with
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youngsters
. On the one hand, one of the justifications is that
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secondary school
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 as teaching tough lessons and getting feedback for
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 leads individuals to
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, Another viable reason is difficulties in dealing with
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youngsters
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 of the significant
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 of life is
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, their
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, many
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 among teenagers which are prohibited
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 schools and
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 laws. To tackle the issue of heavy
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 for
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secondary teachers
, authorities should allocate
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 for every part of
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. Several
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areas
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 questions and teaching.
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, to address the problem of hard communication with
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youngsters
, authorities should hold workshops in order to inform new instructors about teenagers and introduce them
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 to cope with them.
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, in Iran,
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psychological
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especially
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schools, has
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 and problematic communication with teens, to address these issues
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 who are in charge should consider assistabce for
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