You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words. The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?
Working
Correct article usage
The working
week
should be Monday to Thursday, so workers
should have 3 days
weekends. This
essay totally agrees with this
statement and
because Correct word choice
apply
workers
should have one
more day
to rest and expending time
with their families and have
3 Wrong verb form
having
days
of weekends should stimulate the
tourism because more Correct article usage
apply
people
would travel activating the economy for hotels and restaurants.
Working four days
a week
should be enough for employes
and employers giving Correct your spelling
employees
people
one
more day
to rest and to spend more time
with their families. It could be useful for couples with children or babies that need time
to care them
. In fact, Change preposition
for them
return
to Wrong verb form
returning
work
after one
more day
to relax and rest is benefit
for employers because the Add an article
a benefit
workers
would be happy and even work
better giving more profits to the company. In Japan is well known that the companies give their employees time
with their loved ones and also
, they only 6 hours per day
getting benefits for workers
and the companies.
Having 3 days
of
Change preposition
off
weekend
should be Add an article
the weekend
satisfied
for Replace the word
satisfactory
the
tourism because Correct article usage
apply
this
alternative would stimulate travel and accommodations in many parts of the country stimulating the economy. Is well known that many people
wait for holydays
to travel, with Correct your spelling
holidays
one
mor
Correct your spelling
more
day
per week
people
would travel more often. In Argentina
many Add a comma
Argentina,
people
work
only 4 days
a week
, and a lot of them take advantages
Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
to
travel and know new places which is really good Change preposition
of
to disconnect
from the routine and Change preposition
for disconnecting
go
back to Wrong verb form
going
work
with other attitude
.
In conclusion, Change the wording
another attitude
other attitudes
have
Wrong verb form
having
one
more free day
from work
is benefit
for families, Add an article
a benefit
workers
, employers, companies and tourism which result
in more activities and Correct subject-verb agreement
results
better
economy for the country.Correct article usage
a better
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task achievement
Ensure clarity in expressing your points. Some ideas could be more clearly articulated for better understanding.
coherence cohesion
Use more varied sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
language
Avoid some minor grammatical inaccuracies to improve sentence flow and meaning.
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Support your points with more varied and detailed examples to bolster your arguments.
structure
The essay provides clear introduction and conclusion, summarizing key arguments effectively.
task achievement
Good attempt at presenting relevant examples such as the situation in Japan and Argentina.
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The essay remains largely focused on the topic throughout, maintaining relevance to the main question.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.