The chart below gives information about the percentages of overweight men and women in Australia between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the percentages of overweight men and women in Australia between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart compares Australian
males
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and
females
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in terms of each gender’s overweight proportion from 1980 to 2010.
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,
males
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were more likely to be found overweight than
females
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, with a higher
ratio
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of overweight
males
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than that of
females
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shown each
decade
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. In 1980 and 2000, the differences between the two genders were the most noticeable,
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in 1990 and 2010, the gaps narrowed. The year 1980 witnessed 28% of female Australian residents
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overweight, almost half of their male counterparts’
ratio
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at 52%. In the next
decade
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, from the year 1990, a 5% increase in overweight men and a 10% increase in the overweight
ratio
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of women weakened the sheer contrast between the ratios found in the
last
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decade
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. The overweight
ratio
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surged by another 20% for
males
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in 2000,
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the change doubled the amount for
females
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, bringing the difference between the two genders visible again. The difference reversed in 2010, distinctive from 1990,
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the female
ratio
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remained the same as the
last
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decade
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, the
ratio
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for
males
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reduced by 5%, at 49% for
females
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and 65% for
males
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. In conclusion, overweight problems became more prevalent among both men and women in Australia in these forty years, even though the difference in ratios between the two genders was less discerning in the
last
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decade
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compared with the beginning.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, ratio, decade with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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