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The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided charts illustrate the
sales
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 of five different kinds of
books
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 by a bookseller from 1972 to 2012.
Overall
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, it can be seen clearly that
while
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 the
sales
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 of adult
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fictions
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fiction
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 and children’s
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fictions
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fiction
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 rose considerably, the figures for
travels
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travel
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, biographies, and other
books
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 witnessed a significant decline. To commence with, in 1992, adult
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fictions
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fiction
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 and children’s
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fictions
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fiction
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,
as well as
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 biography
books
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, had the same amount of
sales
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 which were recorded as 20%.
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,
while
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 travels were the least purchased
books
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 with 18%, other
books
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 stayed on the top of the list with 25%. Over the following 40 years, the
sales
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 of adult fiction
books
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 experienced an over twofold increase to 45%, becoming the most popular book.
Similarly
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, the figure for children’s
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fictions
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fiction
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 rose
one-fourth
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by one-fourth
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 compared to the initial figure, from 20% to 25%.
By contrast
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, biographies,
travels
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, and other
books
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 witnessed a downward trend, decreasing about 7-8% at each figure.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, books, fictions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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