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The best way to make the road transport of goods saferis to aske drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that it is significant to require people to take a driving
test
 every year because that will help to protect the goods when it is transported. I totally agree with
this
 statement
due to
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for
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 many reasons. On the one hand, the roads in all countries around the world have changed constantly.
For example
, in my
hometown
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hometown,
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 the road changed
last
 month because the path was destroyed when the rain came and the government tried to search for another place to make a new road. So, when people take a driving
test
 they will know about the new roads. On another hand, individuals are facing some troubles and health
problems
 they don't attention to that
however
 when they do a driving
test
 they will take a medical check and they will know if they have
problems
 preventing them from driving.
For instance
, older people may have
problems
 with their eyes or blood pressure and that will cause serious
problems
 when they drive. In conclusion, to make the route transport of goods
more
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safer we should follow all road rules and do a driving
test
 each year to ensure pace for all users and goods.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which is great. This helps the reader understand your position from the start and sums up your arguments effectively.
Supporting Main Points
Try to ensure that each main point is clearly supported with specific examples or evidence. This will help to strengthen your argument and make it more persuasive.
Task Achievement
Ensure that your examples are relevant and specific. The example about road changes is relevant, but clearer examples could make your arguments more convincing.
Task Achievement
You have effectively conveyed your stance on the topic from the beginning and maintained it throughout the essay. This adds clarity to your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion does a good job of summarizing your points and reiterating your position on the issue. This reinforces your argument and provides a strong ending to your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your paragraphs are logically organized, with each one focusing on a single main point. This helps in maintaining a logical flow throughout the essay.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road transport
  • driving test
  • annual assessment
  • safety standards
  • bad habits
  • vehicle technology
  • road infrastructure
  • stressful
  • burdensome
  • performance
  • workshops
  • technology
  • AI-driven monitoring
  • continuous assessment
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