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The plans below show a bookstore in 2000 and the bookstore now.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The provided projects illustrate how a bookstore changed from 2000 to the present.
Overall
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, it can be seen clearly that over a period of time, most of the bookstore’s facilities were altered to serve
for
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apply
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many purposes, except
travels
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travel
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, new
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books
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book
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tables
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, and service desks.
According to
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 the map in 2000, fiction
books
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 accounted for almost all the western and northern walls. In the middle of the bookstore, it is occupied by
cockeries
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cookies
crockeries
cookeries
, hobbies, and arts. Non-fiction
books
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 were allocated
at
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on
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 the right side wall, followed by the service desks.
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, travel and new
books
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tables
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 were situated opposite the entrance, which was convenient for people to access.
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, up to now, the central part including cockeries, hobbies, and art was replaced by three
tables
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. They are now stored at the left corner of the store, which used to be a place for fiction. Non-fiction
book shelves
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bookshelves
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 were transformed into a Café counter.
Due to
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this
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, fiction
books
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 were reduced to set aside space for non-fiction
books
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, which were moved to the northern wall. Notably, travels, new book
tables
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, and service desks are the only things that remained untouched.

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task achievement
Make sure to summarize only the key information without over-detailing. Focus on the most significant and impactful changes that have occurred between the two years.
coherence cohesion
Strive to create a clearer progression throughout the essay with a more defined introduction and conclusion, ensuring each paragraph naturally leads into the next.
coherence cohesion
Utilize linking words like 'moreover', 'furthermore', etc., to better highlight the relationships between the changes.
task achievement
The essay effectively contrasts the major changes in the bookstore's layout from 2000 to the present, providing a clear depiction of the transformations.
task achievement
All key features of the maps are addressed, and relevant comparisons are drawn, which is a crucial element in this type of task.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized with individual paragraphs focused on different areas of the bookstore, offering a logical structure.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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