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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The graphic illustrates the different
activities
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 done by
Chinese
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, American,
Turkish
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 and Brazilian travellers and the
hours
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 spent for that in
Grecee
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Greece
 in the summer of 2019. Visitors spent
hours
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 in
activities
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such
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 as reading books, at the beach and visiting places.
Firstly
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, reading books was the activity that occupied the most time for
Chinese
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toruists
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tourists
averanging
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averaging
 around 8
hours
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, followed by Americans with 5
hours
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. .
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Additionally
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, a similar situation can be seen for
Turkish
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 and Brazilian
traveler
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travelers
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, who both spent approximately 4
hours
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 reading.
Secondly
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, Brazilians showed a preference for beach
activities
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 in Greece with 6 spent
hours
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, followed by
Turkish
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 with 5
hours
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,
Americanat
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Americans
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4
hours
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 and
finally
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Chinese
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tourists
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 at 3
hours
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. Over the whole time period, visiting places was the least
favored
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favoured
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 activity
amoung
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among
 all visitors, American and
Turkish
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tourists
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 spent about 3
hours
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, followed by Brazilian with 2
hours
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 and
then
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Chinese
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tourists
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 who averaged around 1 hour.
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, the chart shows the time spent by 4 different
tourists
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in
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 3 different
activities
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, chinese, turkish, hours, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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