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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart displays how frequently
people
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 in the USA ate fast
food
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 in fast
food
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 restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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, the percentage of Citizens in the USA eating fast
food
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 once a week was Higher in the most period of time,
While
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people
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 who eat fast every day had the lowest proportion. From the data given, the majority of
people
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 in UAS tend to eat from Junk
food
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 restaurants Once a week or Once or Twice a month , with 30 % of the Citizens eating once a week and 25% in 2006 ,
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 in 2013 the percentage of
people
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 who eating Monthly rose
As a result
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 the proportion who eating weekly decreased to 27% roughly. The lowest proportion was both who eat daily or never with nearly 4% and 5% respectively in 2003.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • frequency
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • stabilize
  • decline
  • highlight
  • reduction
  • reliance
  • eating habits
  • population segment
  • weekly basis
  • rarely
  • initial decrease
  • dine
  • establishments
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