The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph shows us information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
General
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The general
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trend is increasing, but amateur dramatics
is
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have been
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decreasing
while
years
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the years
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. The
people
of Melbourne participate in a lot of art
activites
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activities
and sports. Through
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the ages
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ages
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ages,
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they
are
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became
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interested in table tennis and lost interest in amateur dramatics. Participation
of
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in
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film
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the film
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club in ten years
doesn't
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hasn't
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really
change
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changed
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and it is stable. The interest of
people
for
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in
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martial arts is not different for
overall
twenty years. The
numbers
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number
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of participants for
ameteur
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amateur
dramatics is decreasing. In 2020
people
who are joining activities are about 25, but in 2020
this
number is about 5.
In
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At
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the beginning of the
21th
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21st
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century
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century,
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the least participation
is
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was in
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table tennis and it
is
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was
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about 18
people
. But in 2020
this
activity is loved by
people
and it is about 55
people
. In 2005
people
start
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started
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joining
to
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apply
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musical performances, and
this
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these
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numbers are getting higher.
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