The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph shows us information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
General
trend is increasing, but amateur dramatics Add an article
The general
A general
is
decreasing Wrong verb form
have been
while
years
. The Correct article usage
the years
people
of Melbourne participate in a lot of art activites
and sports. Through Correct your spelling
activities
Correct article usage
the ages
ages
they Add a comma
ages,
are
interested in table tennis and lost interest in amateur dramatics.
Participation Verb problem
became
of
Change preposition
in
film
club in ten years Correct article usage
the film
doesn't
really Verb problem
hasn't
change
and it is stable. The interest of Wrong verb form
changed
people
for
martial arts is not different for Change preposition
in
overall
twenty years. The numbers
of participants for Fix the agreement mistake
number
ameteur
dramatics is decreasing. In 2020 Correct your spelling
amateur
people
who are joining activities are about 25, but in 2020 this
number is about 5.
In
the beginning of the Change the preposition
At
21th
Change the ending
21st
century
the least participation Add a comma
century,
is
table tennis and it Verb problem
was in
is
about 18 Wrong verb form
was
people
. But in 2020 this
activity is loved by people
and it is about 55 people
. In 2005 people
start
joining Wrong verb form
started
to
musical performances, and Change preposition
apply
this
numbers are getting higher.Change the determiner
these
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