The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of sunshine hours per year in three major city Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph exhibits average monthly temperatures and the table presents annual sunshine hours on average, both representing London, New York, and
Sydney
.
In general, Sydney
is warmer compare
to Change the form of the verb
compared
other
2 cities as its temperature roams around 15 to 25 Correct article usage
the other
degree
all year long. Meanwhile, New York Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
tend
to be more Change the verb form
tends
flutuate
since during the summer its heat peak at 30 Correct your spelling
fluctuate
degree
, gradually Change to a plural noun
degrees
decrease
over the semester down to below 5. Wrong verb form
decreasing
On the other hand
, London has a more stable climate as it never goes over 25 degree
in the midyear Change to a plural noun
degrees
while
it is just only around 10 during the winter.
In addition
, New York is the area that has the most sunlight per year despite it is
colder during Wrong verb form
being
the
Correct article usage
apply
christmas
. Change the capitalization
Christmas
Furthermore
, Sydney
comes in second with only 2,473 hours of sunshine every year. Lastly
, London has the least amount of sunny days, less than 50% of Sydney
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