The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of sunshine hours per year in three major city Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of sunshine hours per year in three major city

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph exhibits average monthly temperatures and the table presents annual sunshine hours on average, both representing London, New York, and
Sydney
. In general,
Sydney
is warmer
compare
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to
other
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2 cities as its temperature roams around 15 to 25
degree
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all year long. Meanwhile, New York
tend
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to be more
flutuate
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fluctuate
since during the summer its heat peak at 30
degree
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, gradually
decrease
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over the semester down to below 5.
On the other hand
, London has a more stable climate as it never goes over 25
degree
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in the midyear
while
it is just only around 10 during the winter.
In addition
, New York is the area that has the most sunlight per year despite it
is
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colder during
the
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christmas
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.
Furthermore
,
Sydney
comes in second with only 2,473 hours of sunshine every year.
Lastly
, London has the least amount of sunny days, less than 50% of
Sydney
's.
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