Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent In the world today. In the not too distant future, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree in this statement?
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task achievement
Ensure that your arguments align closely with the essay prompt. For example, clearly state if you believe technology could partially or never replace teachers in the classroom.
coherence
To enhance coherence, try using linking words more effectively to show relationships between ideas. This helps in smoother transitions between paragraphs and arguments.
cohesion
Avoid repetitive phrases and aim to clearly support each argument with specific examples or evidence.
coherence
The essay follows a logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which maintains a clear flow.
task achievement
You’ve made an effort to address both the advantages and disadvantages of technology replacing teachers, which demonstrates an understanding of the complexity of the topic.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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