The most important aim of science ought to be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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that the most essential goal of
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experts should be directed
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developing our
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.
However
, there are many drawbacks, which can affect in critical way on our life expectancy and health. In
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I will open my opinion on
this
topic and explain why we should continue our research in finding a way for a better quality of life.
To begin
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our usual routine because of
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science
work.
Moreover
, over the past few
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a lot of new investments were invented in various areas of our health and not only. The vegetables and fruits, that
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growing in countries with cold climates for
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last
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increased significantly. Actually, vitamins and naturals, which
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in these harvests
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increased, as well.
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medicine has got much better,
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of sickness.
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four times in
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from 1800
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2020.
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and carelessness of some
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experts
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the drawbacks were huge and terrible, which
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to fatal consequences.
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caused a lot of harm to
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and financial situation in the world.
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aftermath. The reason for
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powerfull
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powerful
nature is and remember about our own safety in the first place.
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task achievement
Try to include more specific examples and evidence to support your points. For instance, provide concrete cases of scientific advancements improving lives or instances where science has fallen short.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your essay. Connect your ideas more smoothly to enhance readability.
task achievement
The essay successfully outlines both benefits and potential drawbacks of scientific aims.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are present, appropriately framing the discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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