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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foregin language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country . Others say that these are not the only reasons ehy somrone should learn a foreign language Discuss both these views and give your own opini

#people #reason #foregin #language #travel #work #country #ehy #somrone #opini
It is believed that
people
 are learning
the
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other
languages
 just for travelling and working purposes.
While
 others
cliam
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claim
 that there are other reasons for learning foreign
languages
 like personal interests in foreign
language
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languages
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 and culture and education in foreign countries. On the one side, many
people
 argue that travelling would be more convenient
,
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 when
people
 learn the
language
 of
host
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 country.
This
assist
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people
to communicate
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in communicating
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 more
effectivaly
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effectively
 with locals and
heightened
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 interpersonal understanding
due to
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 eliminating
language
 barriers.
Furthermore
, Businesses could communicate with
eas
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 if they
know
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knew
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 one
anothers
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another
another's
languages
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. Companies working internationally and have
costumers
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customers
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 from diverse global backgrounds should allocate a translation part
for enhancing
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to enhance
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 their connection with their
costumers
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customers
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.
For example
, Amazon, which is
an
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 well-known company, provides
costumer
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customer
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 services in many
languages
. On the other side, there are many individuals
educating
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 in foreign
languages
 because of
thier
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their
interests
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interest
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 in
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the litracy
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litracy
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literacy
an
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and
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 culture of certain countries.
This
 leads to
deepen
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 their cultural
undrestanding
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understanding
 and explores other
litracies
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literacies
libraries
.
Moreover
, many students
enroll
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 in foreign universities required them to study
with
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other
languages
. pupils for
educating
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education
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 in foreign universities should meet the
lamguage requiremants
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language requirements
 in order to commence their education there.
For instance
, individuals from Iran should illustrate
language
 proficiency in order to apply
for
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 universities in Germany. In conclusion,
while
taravelling
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travelling
 and work are appropriate reasons for learning other
languages
due to
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improvment
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improvement
of
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communivation
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communication
 with locals and enhancement in
working
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the working
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 situation, there are other significant reasons
such
 as attraction
in
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to
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 foreign
litracy
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literacy
 and
educating
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education
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 with other
languages
.
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language
Pay attention to correct spelling and consistency in word usage to improve clarity, such as 'claim' instead of 'cliam', 'effective' instead of 'effectivaly', and 'literacy' instead of 'litracy'.
language
Enhance sentence variety and complexity to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical structures.
structure
The essay presents a clear introduction that outlines both views on the topic, setting a good stage for the discussion.
structure
The conclusion neatly ties together the main points made in the essay, reaffirming the writer's stance on the topic.
content
The essay includes relevant examples, such as Amazon's customer service, to support the argument and add depth to the discussion.

Your opinion

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