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The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given table illustrates how many food or beverages are served on average in two different seasons.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the most sold servings are hot
coffee
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 compared with others and people prefer iced
coffee
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 in summer rather than in winter. In detail, in winter, the number of hot
coffee
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that is
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 served is approximately 70 ,
while
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 the figure for ice
coffee
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is
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apply
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sold is roughly 3, which is recorded as the smallest of ones. The second largest is soup, recording about 50.
Finally
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, the rest foods, which are ice cream and salad, account for about 25 and 24, respectively.
On the other hand
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, in summer, iced
coffee
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 is the most favourite
servings
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serving
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, which shows roughly 40. The number of ice cream
also
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 accounts for the second largest figure, being between 30 and 40. Hot
coffee
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 records about 30%, which is under half the figure in winter. The number of soups and
salad
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salads
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 are the worst favourite servings,
by
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apply
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showing approximately 25 each other.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number of servings
  • compared to
  • trend
  • increase/decrease in sales
  • consistent pattern
  • seasonal variations
  • notable discrepancies
  • significant differences or similarities
  • external factors
  • consumer preferences
  • economic factors
  • notably higher or lower sales
  • promotions
  • spikes or declines
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