This bar graph shows the number of days lost due to injury per worker for five countries.There are three tome periods shown begining witn the year 1991 and ending in 2005.
The bar chart illustrates how many
days
each worker lost according to
injury in five different countries.The figure presents three time periods,each period
has five-year intervals from 1991 to 2005.
Overall
,it can be seen that China had the most worker's days
lost in the last
decade.
To begin
with,The number
of employee days
lost in China,Korea and America had upward trends within the period
given.However
,the rising rates are different.China began with the most days
lost which was around 6.5 days
.After that,the number
grew exponentially to around 8 days
and eventually reached a peak at just under 10 days
.America and Korea had different starting points,which were at 3 and 3.5 days
respectively but finally
ended at the same number
at just over 5 days
.
Whereas
,Germany had a downward trend,which in the first period
was around 3 days
and the number
declined to under 2.5 days
.Lastly
,The number
in Brazil fluctuated.In the first period
,it accounted for around 6.5 days
then
slightly dropped to 6 days
but eventually the number
climbed up to 7.5 days
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words days, period, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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