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The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided pie charts illustrate sharply the proportion of three different kinds of
books
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 sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012. At first glance, it is apparent that almost
types
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 of
books
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 increased in sales over the given period, including adult
fiction
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, children’s
fiction
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 and travel
books
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. Meanwhile, biography
books
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 tended to decrease
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. Focusing originally on the first chart, it can be obviously perceived that in 1972 the share of three
books
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, including adult
fiction
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, children’s
fiction
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, and biography
books
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, each of them accounted for 20%.
While
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, the number of travel
books
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 was only 15%, and the remaining 25% belonged to other types of
books
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. In the 1992 chart, the figure
of
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for
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 almost
kinds
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all kinds
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 of
books
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 tended to rise slightly, except
biography
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for biography
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books
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.
Finally
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, in 2012, the ratio of adult and children
fiction
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 skyrocketed, in which the former made up nearly
a
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half, and the latter was a quarter. Meanwhile, the percentage of other types of
books
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 occupied an insignificant part.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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