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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in hudroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in hudroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
illustrate
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 how electricity is being produced in hydroelectric
power
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station
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stations
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 using
river's
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the river's
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water
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 energy.
Firstly
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, a dam is placed
on
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in
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they
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the
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 way of river
water
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flow
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 and the volume of
water
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 stuck behind the dam wall forms a high-level reservoir. As shown, there is an opening right under the dam, which lets
water
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 escape.
This
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 intake, only lets
water
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flow
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 to the turbines
at
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in
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day time
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the daytime
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, but at
nights
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night
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 reversible turbines pump the
water
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 in the opposite direction.
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, in the
power
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station
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 we can see that turbines are connected to generators using a shaft, which in
day
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the day
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 time they generate electricity.
In contrast
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, the
flow
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 of
water
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 (from high-level to low-level reservoir in days)
spind
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spend
 the turbine and it makes the generator
to
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apply
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move and produce electricity.
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,
this
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 energy gets transported by
power
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 lines to the areas that need it.
To sum up
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, it can be seen that
power
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 generation from
water
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flow
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 is a
littel
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little
 more complicated than it seems,
however
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, it is still one of the best renewable sources out there.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, water, flow with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Elevation
  • Intake tunnel
  • Turbines
  • Generators
  • Electricity transmission
  • Power lines
  • Grid
  • Peak demand
  • Off-peak times
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