The diagram below shows the process of making olive oil. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of making olive oil. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart illustrates the procedure for how olive
oil
is manufactured.
Overall
, the production process has 8 stages, commencing with gathering the
olives
from trees and ending with delivering
to
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them to
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markets for
sales
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sale
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. During the first stage,
olives
are picked by raking,
then
it is stored in a huge vat for a few days. After 2 to 3 days, stored
olives
will be rinsed out with cold water to remove dirt. In the next stage,
olives
are crushed by hammers in order to get rid of olive stones and powder olive seeds into
paste
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a paste
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. In the subsequent step, olive paste will be filtered and pressed hydraulically.
Next,
oil
is transferred to a huge centrifuge and separated from water.
While
oil
is transported to another stage, excess water will be discarded through a small pipe.
Finally
, extracted
oil
will be bottled and delivered to markets for the purpose of consumption.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, olives with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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