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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single –sex schools have disadvantages later in life.

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communication
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 it depends on what kind of culture and family standards
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introduction advice
Begin your essay with a clear introduction that outlines the topic and your main argument. This sets the tone for the reader and makes your essay easier to follow.
complete response advice
Present a balanced discussion by considering both the advantages and disadvantages of single-sex schools. Include more detailed examples and evidence to support your points.
conclusion advice
Include a conclusion that summarizes your main points and offers a final thought or opinion on the matter. This will enhance the structure of your essay.
coherence device advice
Add more linking phrases and transitional words to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This will enhance coherence and cohesion in your writing.
critical thinking highlight
You have touched on an interesting aspect of communication skills development when discussing single-sex schooling, which shows critical thinking around the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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