Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It is argued that

currently

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governments are focusing their investment

toward

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public

transportation

instead

of adding new roads.

While

it may be more useful, we

also

need to consider that it may not be able to

solved

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the

traffic

jam problems soon.

Nevertheless

, I support the idea

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mass transport. The proponent of public

transportation

is that it is more efficient. By developing a

transportation

infrastructure for the public, it is expected that all

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of society can utilize it,

hence

there will be more

people

that can use it.

This

increase in usage will make the community use less of their private vehicles,

thus

decreasing the probability of

traffic

jam

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.

Real life

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case can be found in Melbourne, as its citizens

already

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satisfied with its connected bus, train and tram network, which makes the road less congested.

On the other hand

, adding new roads can be seen as a quicker solution to enhance the

traffic

. Despite

of

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this

concern,

this

feature is unsustainable

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a long period, since it only

encourage

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people

to use their own car

that

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will only create more

traffic

. One of the

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to break

this

vicious cycle can be found in public

transportation

,

due to

its ability to move a significant amount of

people

at the same time.

For instance

, a bus can carry 40 persons

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a compact vehicle

while

cars

required

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more space to move the same amount of individuals.

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summary, I agree with the government as the

advantage

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of investing in mass

transportation

outweigh its negative aspects

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since it is more efficient

to carry

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significant

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amount of

people