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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures
shows
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show
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a
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apply
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museum maps from 1998 and 2008.
Firstly
, one of the major points of the premise was the permanent exhibition rooms. Previously it is located
at
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on
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 both wings of the building, but
then
 it is renovated to be placed
in
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on
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 the east side.
Secondly
, temporary exhibition
room
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rooms
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 were moved from the southwest to the west end of the building.
Furthermore
, the garden experienced an improvement
due to
 the
fountains
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fountain's
fountains'
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 installations. Meanwhile, the cafe on its north
were
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was
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also
 expanded as the cafe sitting area
were
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was
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 located in the garden's northwest yard. It is
also
 worth
to note
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noting
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 that beside the cafe sits a new restaurant.
Moreover
,
while
initially
 the shop and the bags and coats section were located in the southeast part, in 2008 it was relocated to the premise's southwest part.
Lastly
, the tickets and entrance/exit remained to be located
in
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at
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 the south end of the building.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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