To achieve international sporting success, many countries build specialized facilities for the training of top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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relevant specific examples

Try to use more specific examples to support your arguments, such as mentioning specific sports or countries that have benefited from specialized facilities.

supported main points

Ensure that your main points are fully developed and supported throughout the essay. Consider expanding on the benefits or drawbacks of specialized sports facilities for the general public versus top athletes.

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Focus on improving the clarity of your ideas. Some sentences are complex or have errors that may confuse the reader, so try simplifying these sentences or checking for grammar mistakes.

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introduction conclusion present

Both an introduction and a conclusion are present, effectively opening and closing the essay.

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Fully explain your ideas

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Fully explain your ideas

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