The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the number of males and females in
further
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education
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, which were full-time and part-time studies in 4 periods in China.
Overall
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, it is obviously seen that part-time
education
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was significantly higher all over the period in both genders,
furthermore
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, the number of full-time students experienced a gradual increase in men and women, stabilising at the same level at the final stage.
To begin
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with, mankind accounted for 1,000,000
on
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in
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half-time
education
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in the 70s, which was the highest among the whole time in males and those who studied full-time, beginning with its lowest quantity at the same time. Unlikely, full-time educated men increased remarkably over the 2 decades and the other had a downward trend levelling off at around 250 and 900 thousand respectively.
Secondly
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, the quantity of ladies that studied fully, was at almost 70,000 in the beginning,
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the other one was 10 times more than that in 1970/71. Throughout the whole period, they both had an upward trend, in the 90s part-time
education
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peaked at over 1000 thousand, which was the most in the graph,
whereas
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another reached a peak, standing at just above 200,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Further education
  • Full-time study
  • Part-time study
  • Trends
  • Participation
  • Distribution
  • Disparities
  • Proportions
  • Growth
  • Policy changes
  • Cultural shifts
  • Gender equity
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