July 11 exam discussion The charts below show the proportion ofgraduates with different qualifications working in oneengineering companyin 1980 and 2008
The pie charts compare the proportion of graduates with different qualifications working in one engineering company in 1980 and 2008.
Overall
, it can clearly seen that, working in one engineering company in two different years the highest score
was Master-science
, while
the lowest score
was Ph
.D. Art
.
To begin
with the proportion of graduates in 1980 the Master-science
was the highest score
at 29%, while
the lowest score
was 2% for PhD
. Correct article usage
a PhD
Art
and the Ph
.D-science
was higher slightly to 25%. First-degree science
was lower to 20%. Afterwards, Master Art
lower
considerably to 13%. Wrong verb form
lowered
Then
First degree-Art
represented 11%.
As for 2008, the largest trend was Ph
.D-science
at 30%. Master science
was lower by 1% than PhD science
. Master-Art
and First-degree science
was similar to 12% of graduates. First-degree Art
was 10% and the lowest score
was Ph
.D-Art
at 7%.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words score, ph, art, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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