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THE MAPS BELOW SHOW THE VILAGE OF sTOKEFORD IN 1930 ANDIN 2010. SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTINGG AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE COMPARISON WHERE RELEVANT

THE MAPS BELOW SHOW THE VILAGE OF sTOKEFORD IN 1930 ANDIN 2010. SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTINGG AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE COMPARISON WHERE RELEVANT
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The provided layouts depict the Stokeford village in 1930 and 2010 years.
Overall
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, over the 4 decades,except
the
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 post office and bridge,
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 was relocated and modified, there were set up new roads in front of households for elderly people, filled with houses,
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, the school's condition was upgraded, unlikely farmland and shops got removed.
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 with, the bridge was situated in the northwest and remained unchanged over the given period,
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,
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 office was not relocated and stayed at the bottom.
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, the stores were demolished in 2010, which used to be just above the office.
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, new paths appeared on the left and right sides, rounded by properties. In the 20th century, farmland was in the north and south poles,
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 it disappeared in the new millennium.
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, 2 buildings were added to the school over the given period, and the gardens were modified to the retirement home, rounded with trees around the fence. On the opposite, a new square was founded, that along the road supplied with houses to the south.
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