More and more people in the city live in homes with small spaces or no outdoor areas. Do you think it is a negative or positive development？
It is notable that there is a trend of growing populations living in
accomodations
with less spacious spaces or even without outdoor areas. Correct your spelling
accommodations
accommodation
However
, Linking Words
while
some Linking Words
people
could get benefits from it, I believe that it is a negative development in regard Use synonyms
of
residing in smaller places.
There are several reasons why it is not a positive effect. Change preposition
to
Firstly
, living in rather crowded areas could cause varied forms of Linking Words
health
issues. Use synonyms
For example
, Linking Words
people
cannot Use synonyms
obtained
enough sunlight and fresh air even though windows are opened. It is crucial for humans to get an amount of vitamin D by absorbing the Change the verb form
obtain
be obtained
sunligh
. Without enough Correct your spelling
sunlight
nutruients
, Correct your spelling
nutrients
people
might be getting some mental Use synonyms
health
problems, or even worse, physical Use synonyms
health
issues. Use synonyms
Secondly
, privacy is something relatively essential for every Linking Words
individuals
, without enough private quality time alone, Change to a singular noun
individual
people
cannot have a high quality of life. From my personal experience, when I was living with my flatmates sharing common spaces in the same flat, I could always hear my flatmates' movements or their phone conversations only by Use synonyms
listening
their voices through a single thin wall. Add the preposition
listening to
This
made me Linking Words
fell
extremely uncomfortable because if I could hear them, they must Correct your spelling
feel
can
Verb problem
have
hear
me. Wrong verb form
heard
Thirdly
, sharing common spaces, Linking Words
such
as toilet, kitchen, and shower room with flatmates could be unsanitized. If we are unfortunate enough Linking Words
living
with undesirable Change the verb form
to live
roomates
who don't even bother to clean up the mess they make, it Correct your spelling
roommates
colud
be a major problem. Correct your spelling
could
Also
, we may need to spend extra time discussing the house Linking Words
chroes
distribution and arrangements. Correct your spelling
chores
This
could result in destroying the relationship between each other.
In conclusion, living in smaller places causes us not only Linking Words
health
issues Use synonyms
due to
not obtaining enough nutrients in daily life, but Linking Words
also
Linking Words
lead
to related problems in terms of traumatizing the social relationship with Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
people
we co-living with.Use synonyms
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