The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in

Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The chart elaborates on the data of the variation that took place in three different areas of misconduct in Panama City between 2010 to 2019.
Overall
, the rate of burglary was at its peak in 2011 with the number of
cases
around 3700.
While
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car theft and robbery
cases
were in a range nearly at 2500 and 700 respectively.
However
, burglary incidents after 2011 showed a sudden dramatic fall from 2012 to 2015 afterwards it continues with
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of
cases
of approximately 1000 till 2019.
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, car theft
cases
began
from
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2700
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although
, from the middle of 2012 to 2016 , the number of
cases
dropped to around 2000 ,
but
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at the end
of
this
2019
cases
came back
at
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the
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beginning
from
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where
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started to happen.
On the other hand
, robbery
cases
remain at the lowest among all, from the inaugurated nearby 700. Afterwards, the pattern was like a zigzag till the end.
In addition
, the maximum and minimum
cases
over the period of time were around 900 in 2012 and 500 in 2015. In the end,
this
also
ended up with the number of occurrences as the same as the start.
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  • Crime rates
  • Fluctuated
  • Significant spike
  • Consistent trend
  • Prevalent
  • Cumulative change
  • Enforcement
  • Correlate
  • Reduction/increase in crime
  • Categories of crime
  • Level of crime
  • Period of time
  • Analysis
  • Data representation
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