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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts compare data about the percentage of people who used 5 various ways to receive the
news
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 in not only
Canada
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 but
also
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Australia
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.
Overall
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, it was important that in both countries TV and Online were the most popular methods that populations used to access the
news
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.
According to
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 the diagram, the online, the main item that Australians used for obtaining the
news
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, hit just over
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half for
Australia
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 and 36% for
Canada
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. TV, which was the most crucial factor for Canadians to get the
news
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, reached two-fifths of
Canada
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;
moreover
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,
Australia
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 in
this
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 section reported 3% less than
Canada
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. The graphs demonstrate that The newspapers recorded 14% for
Canada
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;
furthermore
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,
Australia
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 scored
a
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half of
Canada
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's proportion. Later the
last
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 elements in
Canada
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 were Radio, touching 7 per cent, and Not specified, recording 3%, but in
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Australia
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Australia,
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 these parts hit the same fraction as each other at a tiny portion.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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