The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the proposed plan for a new
town
.
Overall
, this
proposed plan includes different accommodations for the town
town
dwellers. Including, but not limited to, Remove the redundancy
apply
houses
, Roads
and recreational areas. There are also
two industry zones present.
A close at the map reveals that most of the space within the town
is reserved for houses
which itself is in two parts. The inner circle is filled with houses
and there are bus stands and parking spaces at the centre of the town
. Surrounding this
area, are the ring roads
which are connected to the centre via 4 roads
. In addition
to the houses
at the centre, there are also
houses
to the sides of the town
.
Moreover
, there are seven roads
taking the traffic in and out of the town
.
Recreational areas are also
in the town
as well. They are situated near the houses
and by the roads
. However
, almost each one
of them is in the inner circle with only one
of them being located out of it.
Furthermore
, there are 2 different areas reserved for industry purposes. one
of them is located in the south-east and the other one
on the opposite side of the town
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