Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
While
some people argue that cooking is a valuable skill
which goes on throughout our lives and youth
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that youth
today
should learn how to cook basic meals as it is a survival skill
and many benefits, which can not be overlooked, many other
believe that it is a wasting time and resources. Fix the agreement mistake
others
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essay intends to discuss both perpectives
. I believe it should be a personal choice and can not not imposed on the children.
There are many reasons why some individuals believe that it is an essential Correct your spelling
perspectives
skill
and should be incorporated as a school subject
. First of all, we are living in a global village today
and sometimes, we send our children to the
neighbouring countries to study and grow. They come across Correct article usage
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such
as manageing
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that
they can purchase food Correct pronoun usage
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everday
from outside, but if they know how to cook, it is relatively cheaper and money-saving. Correct your spelling
every day
Secondly
, in the era of inflanation
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today
, I think it can be helpful for them if they have taught cooking to their child,
so that they do not need to worry about their kids as they are able to make basic meals for them. In view of Remove the comma
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skill
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On the other side, who
assert that it is not a Correct pronoun usage
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, give their reasons as follows. Firstly
, it is a waste of time as per their opinion because in
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this
era of technology, they can order and receive food in the
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and they do not think that it is advisable to add it as a Correct your spelling
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subject
in schools. Secondly
, students are struggling with their studies today
because of the competition, peer-pressure
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parents
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of going ahead of each other. Correct your spelling
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creating
extra pressure which can lead to serious health problems Wrong verb form
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such
as depression and weight gain. That is
why, they think it should not be added as a
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In conclusion, I reiterate my opinion that it is a blessing for the learners if they are interested to learn
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need
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, it can be optional
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Coherence
Ensure clarity in your sentences by simplifying complex structures, which can enhance readability and coherence. For example, sentences like 'Sometimes they do not have enough money that they can purchase food everyday from outside, but if they know how to cook, it is relatively cheaper and money-saving' can be broken down to simplify understanding.
Task Achievement
Strengthen your argument with more elaborated examples and perspectives to reflect complex thinking.
Grammar
Review grammar and vocabulary to enhance precision and reduce minor errors. For example, the use of 'inflanation' instead of 'inflation'.
Coherence
The essay presents a balanced view of the topic, offering points for both sides before expressing a clear personal opinion.
Structure
The introduction and conclusion are clear and provide a thoughtful framework for the discussion.
Task Achievement
Clear points are provided supporting both perspectives, with persuasive arguments to frame the importance of the cooking skill.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.