In the past, photography was used to real people and places; however, because of technology, today you cannot trust what you see. Is it a negative or positive aspect of development?

Nowadays, when someone looks at a picture, it is hard to tell
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by modern
technology
, mostly AI. Some
people
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,
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others believe it helps us have a better life. I
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personally
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such
technology
would be helpful, and we just need to be more accurate.       On the one hand, it is an undeniable truth that, human
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differ from other living pieces with creativity, and it has
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people
improve their life. I believe that
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the new
technology
in making imaginative
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, which seems real is beneficial for several reasons.
Firstly
, designers can use
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technology
to
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develop
their presentation of their design.
For example
, when my family and I had decided to decorate our home, a designer by
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creating
his model and using AI
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his design more realistic, was
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really
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a better decision.
Secondly
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has developed considerably, and I think, it
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entertainment
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industry, but
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has advantages in
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of
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system.
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,I recently read an article about
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history book, which pictured
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age time, and I
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it really helpful for learning about our past.      
On the other hand
, some
people
take advantage of
such
technology
.
For example
, by making unreal and unhealthy
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teenagers, they
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to blackmail them.
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some presses
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their news by making
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famous
people
. I believe it is our responsibility
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trust what we see, or not. It might
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hard but possible.       In
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conclusion
, I believe that, despite the disadvantage of
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technology
, it could be very beneficial in
this
modern age.
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, it is very important that
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we
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be more careful about  our children, who might
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more than us
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this
technology
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coherence cohesion
Your essay has a good introduction and conclusion, which frames the argument well. However, the coherence could be improved with smoother transitions between ideas and paragraphs. Consider using linking words such as 'furthermore', 'therefore', etc., to better guide the reader through your arguments.
task achievement
You addressed the task effectively by discussing both positive and negative aspects of the development of photography technology. However, your response can be more fully developed by providing a more in-depth exploration of each point. Consider adding more specific examples and explanations to strengthen your essay.
task achievement
You provide relevant and specific examples to support your main points, such as the use of AI in design and education, which helps in illustrating your arguments effectively.
coherence cohesion
You successfully introduce the topic and conclude your essay, summarizing your stand point. It's clear to the reader what your perspective is.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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