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The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph demonstrates the wildlife
population
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 in North America and
it's
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its
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 coastal areas in 6 years from 2011 to 2016. The data is calibrated in numbers. I will elaborate
the
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 features with relevant comparisons
further
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.
Overall
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, the
population
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 of bears
increase
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increased
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 rapidly during the period,
while
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on the other
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hand
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 the dolphins
are
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were
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 facing
an
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extinction and the number of whales remained stable or fluctuating.
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 with, in 2011 there
were
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 not a single trace of bears in North America, but surprisingly in 2012,
they
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 were approximately 50
thousand
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 bears living in that coastal area.
This
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 number dramatically raised up to 180
thousand
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 in the next five years
untill
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until
 the end of the period.
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, unlike the
population
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 of bears,
dolphin
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the dolphin
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population
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 was found at around 150
thousand
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 in 2011, it keeps dropping significantly every year and finished in 2016.
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, the number of whales from 2011 to 2016 shows a fluctuating yet hover trajectory, at the beginning of the year they found about 70
thousand
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 Whales in the area and after some
swings
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 it marginally
end
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ended
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 up to 70
thousand
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 again.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population variation
  • wildlife species
  • coastal areas
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • year-by-year analysis
  • significant changes
  • species-wise comparison
  • influence
  • climate change
  • human activities
  • conservation efforts
  • natural predation
  • inland areas
  • population trends
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