The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Austrailian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The two charts
illustrates
the comparative percentile analysis of Change the verb form
illustrate
amount
of domestic Add an article
the amount
energy
consumptions
in Australia and Fix the agreement mistake
consumption
resulting
greenhouse gas Correct article usage
the resulting
emisions
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emissions
due to
this
usage.
Overall
, most of the energy
is used in heating processes in houses
while
cooling and lighting equipments
utilize Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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a minmum
minmum
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minimum
amount
of energy
. Similarly
, heating
process and other Correct article usage
the heating
appliances
emits
most Change the verb form
emit
of
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apply
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
gases
while
this
percntage
is low for Correct your spelling
percentage
referigrating
, cooling and lighting sources.
On the one hand, Correct your spelling
refrigerating
highest
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the highest
amount
of energy
is ustilized
to keep the Correct your spelling
utilized
utilised
houses
and water warm in Australian houses
with 42 and 30 percent
respectively.
Other Change the spelling
per cent
appliances
used in houses
consume second
most Add an article
the second
amount
of energy
which is around 15 %.
Collectively 13 % energy
is dedicated for refrigeration, lighting and cooling purposes.
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of energy
On the other hand
, almost equale
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equal
amount
of greenhouse Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
gases
are excreted from water heating which is around 30 %. Contrarily other appliances
emit more gases
(around 28 % ) compared to amount
of Add an article
the amount
energy
consumed. Similarly
around 15 % gases
are released during keeping the Change preposition
of gases
houses
warm. Moreover
, refrigrating
, lighting and cooling Correct your spelling
refrigerating
refrigeration
appliances
contribute to 7 to 14 % Correct your spelling
gaseous
gaseuos
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of gaseuos
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emissions
emmisions
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emissions
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