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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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 a library's ground floor in 2001 and how it changed in 2009.
Overall
, in the past 8 years, the library gained more genres of
books
 and technological updates
such
 as computers. In 2001, only 3 genres of
books
 were available, namely, self-help
books
, history, and fiction. Throughout the years, cookbooks, economics, and law
books
 were added.
Due to
this
addtion
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addition
, the sections for the previous genres were made smaller to
accomodate
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accommodate
 the new ones.
Moreover
, tables were added to the back area of the building where the fiction section used to be.
Furthermore
, a new feature, the children's area, was added near the tables. Meanwhile, the newspaper and periodicals area were replaced with shelves for films and DVDs. Near the entrance, 2 sets of computers were added. With all these changes, the librarian's desk, the entrance, and the stairs remained in the same position as it was in 2001.
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task achievement
Ensure that all main features of the task are covered. Mention any aspects of the floor plan that could further enrich your essay, such as the layout changes or any facilities that might have been removed.
coherence cohesion
Introduce and conclude your descriptions more clearly. A brief conclusion summarizing the changes observed or the overall impact of them would enhance cohesion.
task achievement
You successfully identified and described the major changes in the library, such as the introduction of new book genres and technological upgrades, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.
coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates a logical structure, beginning with an overview and then detailing specific changes. This clear organization improves readability and comprehension.

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