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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables show how farmers from five
countries
 (
UK
,
Switzerland
,
Denmark
, Belgium,
Sweden
) should pay an
official
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officially
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 agreed fair price based on the
sales
 of
coffee
 and
bananas
 in 1999 and 2004. Explained in millions of
euros
.
Overall
, there is a
slightly different
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slight difference
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 in the growth rates of
Coffee
 and
Bananas
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banana
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sales
.
For the
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The
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sales
 of
Coffee
 from 1999 to 2004
showing
Wrong verb form
showed
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 an
increase
 in all of the European
countries
. Meanwhile, for
sales
 of
Bananas
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Bananas,
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 only 3
countries
 show
the
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an
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increase
of
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in
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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sales
 (
Switzerland
,
Correct article usage
the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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, Belgium) and for
Sweden
 and
Denmark
 the
sales
are
Verb problem
apply
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decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
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. The
sales
 of
fairtrade-labelled
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fair trade-labelled
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coffee
, from 5
countries
, it can be seen that in 1999
Switzerland
 had the highest
sales
, followed by
Denmark
, 3,000
euros
 and 1,800
euros
 respectively. But in 2004 we can see that the
increase
of
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in
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
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coffee
sales
 in
UK
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the UK
show examples
 was significant,
therefore
UK
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the UK
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become
Wrong verb form
became
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 the highest
sales
 of
Coffee's
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Coffee
show examples
fairtrade
Capitalize word
Fairtrade
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 with a number of 20,000
euros
. Both the lowest
sales
 of
Coffee
 in 1999 and 2004
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 the country of
Sweden
, only 800
euros
 and 1,000
euros
). For the fairtrade of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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Banana's
Change noun form
Banana
show examples
sales
,
Switzerland
become
Verb problem
had
show examples
 the upmost
sales
 in 1999 and 2004 with
the
Correct article usage
apply
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numbers
reach
Wrong verb form
reaching
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 15,000
euros
 and 47,000
euros
, respectively. In 2004
Bananas
 still
become
Wrong verb form
became
show examples
Correct article usage
a favorite
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favorite
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favourite
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, proven by the significant
increase
 in the
sales
 of
the
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apply
show examples
Bananas
 (up to 4 times higher). In the
mean time
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meantime
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, in
Sweden
 and
Denmark
Add a comma
Denmark,
show examples
 the consumer preferences
of
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for
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Bananas
 are declining, only 1,000
euros
 and 900
euros
, each.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, uk, switzerland, denmark, sweden, sales, coffee, bananas, euros, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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