The first chart below shows the number of airline crew (pilots, stewards etc) needed to fly a passenger plane between Australia and a number of other countries. The second chart shows the number of passenger complaints per plane journey made on these routes, and average kilogram (kg) weight of luggage (or baggage) carried per passenger.

The first chart below shows the number of airline crew (pilots, stewards etc) needed to fly a passenger plane between Australia and a number of other countries. The second chart shows the number of passenger complaints per plane journey made on these routes, and average kilogram (kg) weight of luggage (or baggage) carried per passenger.
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The following first
chart
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compares the
number
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of airline crew who needed to fly between Australia and other nations,
while
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the second
chart
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illustrates both the
number
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of
traveler
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traveller
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claims per
airplane
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aeroplane
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and the
weight
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that allowed for passengers to carry on in kg.
Overall
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, it is clearly highlighted that the comparison between the four nations Malaysia, New Zealand, Germany, and Indonesia;
however
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, there are fluctuations in both charts. Having a closer look at the first
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, it is interesting to note that Germany has the largest
number
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of airline crew at over 14, followed by Indonesia at over 10 crews.
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, Malaysia and New Zealand accounted for the lowest
number
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of airline crew at 8 and 6 crews, respectively. Turning to the second
chart
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, it is remarkable that there is a great difference between the
weight
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of luggage and the
number
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of complaining passengers per flight;
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; the carry-on
weight
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in Germany occupies the top position at over 35 kg per
traveler
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,
whereas
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it is the lowest of complaints which there
is
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nearly no claims.
In contrast
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, New Zealand is completely opposite, the average kilogram
weight
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of baggage is the smallest,
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the passenger complaints per plane journey was the highest at nearly 5.
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