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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The graph illustrates the figures of markets that are closed
while
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 others are
opend
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opened
open
 in one region
since
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from
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 2011 until 2018.
To begin
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 with,
it is clear that
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 the
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numbers
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number
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 of
opinings
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opinions
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 started at the highest point in 2001 rather than the closures.
Firstly
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, the number of
shops
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had
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apply
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opene approximatly
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opened approximately
was
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apply
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8500
then
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 dramatically plummeted in 2012
moreover
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, had grew significantly in 2014 to reach 6000
shops
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 after that
droped
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dropped
 again to
be
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apply
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4000
shops
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 but remained stable until 2017 to
decreased
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decrease
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 again.
On the other hand
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, closed
shops
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 had
begin
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begun
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 with between 6000 and 6300 since
year
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the year
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then
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 it had
increase
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increased
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regulary
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regularly
 to
achive
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achieve
 the highest number in 2013 after that remain
droped
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dropped
draped
 until had the lowest point in 2015 which is nearly to be zero.
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Although
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However
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, the
numbers
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are
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apply
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rose significantly until
reach
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reached
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the
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a
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 stability point over
years
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the years
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.
overall
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, The lines
are
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apply
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describe upward and downward
of
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apply
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numbers
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 that
explains
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explain
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 there
is
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are
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 no fixed
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numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
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 of
shops
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 and the country
had improve
Wrong verb form
has improved
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 over
years
Correct article usage
the years
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "droped" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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