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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart provides key information about the ages of the population of
Yemen
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 and Italy. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
Yemen
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 and Italy show an increase in 60+
years
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 of gatogry.
In addition
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, in
Yemen
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 from 15 to 59
years
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 number will increase
whereas
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 in Italy it will decrease.
According to
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 what is shown in 2000
Yemen
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's population from 0 to 14
years
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 was half of the total and in Italy was less than fifth, in
Yemen
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 from 15 to 59
years
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 it was 46.3 per cent and in Italy, it was the biggest rate which is 61.6% and for 60+
years
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 it was the smallest rate in
Yemen
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 3.6% and quarter on Italy. In terms of, 2050 in
Yemen
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 from 15 to 59
years
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 a significant increase from 46.3 to 57.3% will be more than half of the rate, and it will decrease by 60+
years
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 from 50 to 36%. In Italy, there will be a big drop in 15 to 59 and 60+
years
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. And it will be doubled in 0 to 14
years
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • young population
  • mature population
  • aging society
  • demographic shift
  • proportion
  • dominant
  • balanced distribution
  • projected increase
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