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Band 4

Task 2 Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree .

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Some people believe that
internet
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 will be the most beneficial way to learn about the news,
however
, I believe that the
newspapers
also
 are the best way to read something equally
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 the
internet
. On the one
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 there are a lot of
benefits
 to
learn
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by
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newspapers
. The main reason is that
,
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 you completely understand the concept of
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 when you are reading
newspapers
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if you more read books, the more your
interesting
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 increases little by little day by day.
These factor
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,
as a result
, lead to more information to improve your
intelligent
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. In turn , nowadays so many people become one-dimensional
person
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because of not interested in reading
news
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. On the other hand
internet
 sources are likely to become as popular as
newspapers
 for a variety of reasons.
Firstly
, individuals can find information without difficulties compared to the journals.
Furthermore
 these days there are a lot of
benefits
 to
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 the
internet
 for
the
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students. For example, candidates may
be unite
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 to
the
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online courses which
is improve
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 their intelligence level . Students
maybe
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 share their well-structured opinions with each other by online chats. Another key
benefits
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internet
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benefits
 compared to
the
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newspapers
 are
ebility
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ability
 to follow their teachers via
internet
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 programs
such
 as Instagram, Twitter or YouTube. A final point is that the source of news is less damaging to the environment. In conclusion, the source of
internet
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 become more popular step-by-step,
however
, I believe that
newspapers
 are still equally important.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and avoid sentences that may distract from it.
task achievement
Develop a more focused thesis statement that clearly states your position and guides the argument throughout the essay.
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Support your points with specific and relevant examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
You successfully included both an introduction and a conclusion, which frame your essay well.
task achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the task requirements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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