The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.
The provided bar chart reveals how much spending
for
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health in percentage of the Gross Domestic Product in several Europe countries in three years: 2002, 2007, and 2012.
Overall
, some of the nations had
a stable expenditures
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stable expenditures
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,
while
others varied in each of the mentioned years. Switzerland
spend
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the most amount
for
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health
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sector,
whereas
the lowest was for Estonia.
According to
the graph, Switzerland
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around 11% of Gross Domestic Product in the three years, followed by Belgium at one-tenth.
Following
this
pattern, the expenditure of Spain and Estonia was 2% and 5% below Belgium respectively.
On the other hand
, the remaining nations had a changing figure in one of the
year
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.
For instance
, Denmark, Lithuania, Slovenia, and Poland spent the most amount in 2012 at 10%, 6%, 9% and 7% each.
On the contrary
, Luxembourg, France, and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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which
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allocated the smallest percentage that year. France allocated the highest percentage in 2007 (11%),
while
for the Netherlands, it was in 2002 (10%)
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • Percentage of GDP
  • Trend analysis
  • Economic prosperity
  • Health outcomes
  • Quality of healthcare
  • Allocation of resources
  • Healthcare services
  • Political, social, and economic factors
  • International organizations
  • Government policies
  • Predictive trends
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