The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts the data on the relation between age and illegal
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work
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while
the pie chart shows the types of
crime
took
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place in the UK throughout the
last
year
.
However
,
according to
the line chart, 12
years
was the time in life when
people
got involved with criminal acts. During
last
year
, around 50000 boys were responsible for different types of vulgar activities which increased dramatically in the age group of 16 and reached the peak at the age group of 20 with a
number
of 0.8 million
people
.
Then
, a drastic fall was seen and the
number
came down to 200000 in the 28
years
old category. After that, the
number
decreased gradually and
finally
came to the lowest
at
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the 60
years
group with a
number
shy of 100000
people
in the
last
year
.
On the other hand
, 46% of the total criminal activities in the UK were related to different types of violation which was, in fact, the highest, followed by property
crime
, dealing with drugs, and
crime
related to public order with the numbers of 23%, 22% and 9% respectively.
Overall
,
the
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young
people
of
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20
years
old were at the top of the pyramid in case of
occuring
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a
crime
whereas
violation was the most recurring
crime
in the UK during the
last
year
.
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