The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two rendered maps, which depict in great detail, illustrate the comparison
city
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of city
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centre
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centres
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in two time periods.
Overall
, it is clearly observable that in the Southern
town
centre
in 1990, there were many houses
while
,
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today
they become apartment blocks. To commence with, in 1990, in the northern
city
centre
there were many separate shops
such
as
newsagent's
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newsagents
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,
Grocer's
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Grocer
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,
Baker's
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bakers'
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,
Butcher's
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Butcher
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and Cafe
whereas
,
today
all separate shops become a shopping mall.
Also
Smith Street in 1990
that
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cars could pass through there, now both sides are dead ends and only people can pass.
Furthermore
, between the
town
hall and
bank
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the bank
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, a pedestrian line is drawn now. On the flip side, in 1990, in southern
town
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towns
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city
were many houses but
today
, they
rebuild
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have
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as well
as
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and
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become apartment blocks.
In addition
, between
Town
tall and Apartment blocks a pedestrian line is drawn now. Apart from, the mentioned changes no other changes have been made in the
city
centre
in 1990 and
today
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre, town, today with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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