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The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two rendered maps, which depict in great detail, illustrate the comparison
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city
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of city
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centre
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centres
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 in two time periods.
Overall
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, it is clearly observable that in the Southern
town
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centre
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 in 1990, there were many houses
while
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,
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today
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 they become apartment blocks. To commence with, in 1990, in the northern
city
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centre
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 there were many separate shops
such
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newsagent's
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newsagents
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,
Grocer's
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Grocer
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,
Baker's
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bakers'
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,
Butcher's
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Butcher
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 and Cafe
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,
today
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 all separate shops become a shopping mall.
Also
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 Smith Street in 1990
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cars could pass through there, now both sides are dead ends and only people can pass.
Furthermore
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, between the
town
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 hall and
bank
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the bank
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, a pedestrian line is drawn now. On the flip side, in 1990, in southern
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town
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towns
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city
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 were many houses but
today
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, they
rebuild
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have
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as well
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as
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and
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 become apartment blocks.
In addition
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, between
Town
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 tall and Apartment blocks a pedestrian line is drawn now. Apart from, the mentioned changes no other changes have been made in the
city
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centre
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 in 1990 and
today
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre, town, today with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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