Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
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have different views about that nowadays most 
people
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have a tendency to purchase more things by persuasion by advertising.
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some
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argue that advertising can not make
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purchase in the long term.
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essay will discuss these topics of view and argue on
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topic. On the one hand, there are several reasons why these days advertising has influenced many
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and made it successful.
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The influence of celebrities can be a powerful reason for some purchasing decisions.
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, Dentisite toothbrush has Lisa from BlackPink as a presenter, resulting in a 20% increase in sales in the first month.
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the
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has created video and advertisements are engaging and trustworthy, causing many
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to want to try and buy it.
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, a campaign on social media like flash
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or discount codes
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as Shopee, Lazada, and TikTok  has an effect on many
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's interest
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things.
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, some
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believe that the
advertisement
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there is an exaggeration in the presentation and some items that are purchased are not as effective as they should be.
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, my mother bought cosmetics from social media because in the
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there is a tagline saying that the result will be seen within 1 month.
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, the result of its use does not change anything.
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, many
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awareness
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exaggerated of
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advertisement
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advertisements
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and there is more caution in buying things The conclusion,
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the influence has
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of
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purchasing, many
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have shopping
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being done more carefully.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea, and avoid introducing too many concepts at once to maintain clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion
Strengthen the argumentative structure by clearly contrasting both views before providing your opinion.
Task Achievement
Provide further clarity and depth to the opinion statement and conclusion to enhance the completion of the response.
Task Achievement
Ensure there is a direct reference to specific examples for both views discussed to support your arguments more comprehensively.
Task Achievement
The essay contains relevant and specific examples, especially the use of a real-life marketing campaign to support the argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
The introduction sets the stage for discussing both points of view, demonstrating a clear understanding of the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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