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You visited a hotel last week and left some items behind. Write a letter to the manager stating 1. Details of your stay 2. How important the items are to you 3. How you would want the items to the sent to you

#hotel #week #items #manager #sent
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Hi Manager, I'm writing
this
 email regarding
about
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the lost items in the
hotel
.
Last
 week, I stayed in
the
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room 304 in
this
hotel
 for three
day
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days
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 from Monday to Wednesday with my family. I had
pleasant
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 time during my stay especially
staff
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the staff
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are
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delivery
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 outstanding customer service. Today, I notified
that
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 I left my
samsung
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 tab in your
hotel
.
This
 tab is very important to me,
alot
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a lot
 of sentiment for
this
item
 and
contain
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alot
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a lot
 of
document
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 related to my work,
photos
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and photos
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. Some of my time, I will do my work in
this
 tab. I kindly request your assistance
to retrieve
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this
item
. I will take care of
delivery
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the delivery
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 package cost. Once the
item
securely
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package
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, Please let me know. I will book
delivery
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a delivery
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 person to collect an
item
 from your
hotel
 and shipping my address. Please feel free to contact me to co-ordinate regarding
this
 matter. Looking
foward
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forward
 to
hear
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the
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 positive response. Regards Dhivya
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task achievement
Make sure to check for small grammar mistakes or missing words to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively by starting a new paragraph to introduce a new point or idea.
task achievement
You provided clear details about your stay and the importance of the lost item.
task achievement
The letter has a polite and formal tone, which is suitable for addressing a hotel manager.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear opening and closing, which helps structure the letter well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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