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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts illustrate the share of
water
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usage
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 in different sectors in six regions of the world.
Overall
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, out of all the regions, only in North
America
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 and
Europe
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 where the agriculture sector does not dominate
water
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usage
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. Both in North
America
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 and
Europe
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, industrial
use
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 dominates
water
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usage
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 with 48% and 53%, respectively.
While
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 North
America
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 has the higher percentage of 39% in agricultural
use
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,
Europe
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 only has 32%.
Nonetheless
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, domestic
use
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 in
Europe
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 is slightly higher compared to North
America
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. In the other 4 areas, namely South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and Southeast
Asia
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, agricultural
use
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 dominates the
water
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usage
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 percentage.
While
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 the
usage
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 in Central
Asia
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, Africa, and Southeast
Asia
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 goes over 80%, South
America
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 only has 71% .
However
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, domestic
use
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 in South
America
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 is the highest among 6 other regions with 19%.
Moreover
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, South
America
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 and South East
Asia
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 have higher industrial
use
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 with over 10% compared to Africa and Central
Asia
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 with just under 10%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, america, europe, use, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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