Is the radio the best way to get news, or is TV better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
think
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getting news
radio
would be
good
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a good
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choice, but others think
TV
would be better.
Although
, news which is from
radio
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the radio
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is more comfortable to
getting
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get
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new information.
However
, on television
people
can see with
pectures
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pictures
and they can understand fully. On the one
hand
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hand,
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radio
is the
most
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convenient than other items which
is
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are
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for getting
informations
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information
pieces of information
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.
For example
:
people
can get
informations
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information
pieces of information
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on
road
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the road
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in their car or on
bus
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the bus
a bus
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and they do not most to
send
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spend
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many
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apply
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time
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times
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to get news.
As a result
, they can easily find
reference
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a reference
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which
is need
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is needed
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for them. If they do not have
radio
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a radio
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they have to spend
their
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most time
to watch
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watching
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TV
or other videos. On the other side on
television
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television,
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people
have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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to get
report
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reports
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fully and clearly with colourful videos and
also
there are visual impact which is more fascinating to watch.
For instance
: in their home when they
wont
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won't
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convene their time meaningful and they
able
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are able
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to see it.
As a
consequence
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consequence,
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they get
reference
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more references
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fully than
radio
.
However
, when we do not get information from
TV
and
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we can not get it entirely.
Thus
,
TV
is
most
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more
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suitable technological equipment than
radio
.
To conclude
, both these media are not
equalent
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equivalent
and interchangeable with each other, as they
uneque
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unique
characteristics. The television,
however
, has a slight edge over the
radio
becouse
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because
of its visual impact.
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