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The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 inthree different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 inthree different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
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The line graph illustrates the changes in the number of residents in three
counties
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 (
Columbia
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,
Yamhill
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, and Washington) in the Oregon state in America over a 60-year
period
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.
Overall
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, Washington consistently had the largest
population
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 in the state of Oregon during the whole
period
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, with all three
counties
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 showing varying degrees of upward trends. In detail, Washington County started with about 75,000 residents in 1940 and saw a steady increase to over 120,000 by 1970. From that point, its
population
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 rose at an even faster pace during the rest of the
period
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, reaching over 240,000 in 2000, maintaining the lead in
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 size among the other
counties
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.
Similarly
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, both
Yamhill
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 and
Columbia
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counties
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 experienced
population
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 growth, despite the slower growth rate. In 1940,
Yamhill
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 and
Columbia
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 both had nearly 30,000 residents. The
population
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 of
Yamhill
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 increased gradually to 45,000 by 1970,
while
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Columbia
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 grew more modestly to just over 30,000. During the final three decades, both
counties
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 saw
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more accelerated growth, with
Yamhill
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 reaching 90,000 and
Columbia
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 reaching 75,000 by the end of the
period
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 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words counties, columbia, yamhill, period, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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